Developmental editing for fiction writers
A compelling story is more than a great idea. It needs strong structure, believable characters, effective pacing, emotional resonance, and a satisfying ending.
As Head of Editorial at NAC Literary Agency and a traditionally published author, I've helped more than 100 writers strengthen their manuscripts and prepare them for submission, publication, or self-publishing.
Whether you're working on a first draft, revising a completed manuscript, or preparing to query agents, I can help you identify what's working, what isn't, and how to take your story to the next level.
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What is developmental editing?
Developmental editing focuses on the big-picture elements of your manuscript, including:
Plot and story structure
Character development and motivation
Pacing and tension
Point of view
Theme and emotional impact
World-building
Genre expectations and market positioning
Through detailed editorial feedback, I help you strengthen the structure, clarity, and emotional impact of your story while preserving your voice and intention.
What you'll receive
Each developmental edit includes:
Detailed in-text comments throughout your manuscript
Light line editing where appropriate
A comprehensive editorial report outlining strengths and areas for improvement
Practical revision suggestions and craft recommendations
A 1-hour follow-up Zoom or phone consultation to discuss feedback and next steps
You'll leave with a clear revision plan and a stronger understanding of your manuscript.
My editorial approach
I look at fiction through both a creative and structural lens, focusing on how each element supports the reader’s experience.
There's nothing I enjoy more than helping writers sharpen a cliffhanger, layer in effective foreshadowing, balance backstory, and build the kind of tension that keeps readers turning pages.
I look closely at whether:
the opening hooks the reader
the inciting incident arrives at the right moment
the middle maintains momentum
the stakes continue to escalate
the climax delivers a satisfying payoff
character arcs feel authentic and earned
My goal is not to rewrite your story, but to help you create the strongest version of it.
Genres & projects I edit
Fiction Genres
Commercial fiction
Women's fiction
Book club fiction
Romance (all heat levels)
Romantasy
Historical fiction
Literary fiction
Suspense
Thriller
Mystery
Crime
LGBTQIA+ fiction
Young adult
Middle grade
Science fiction
Fantasy
Formats
Novels
Novellas
Short stories
Selected poetry projects
Who I work with
Debut novelists
Aspiring authors preparing to query agents
Traditionally published authors
Indie authors
Established and bestselling authors
Whether you're completing your first manuscript or your fifteenth, I'll help you refine your story and move forward with clarity and confidence.
Flexible editing options
Full manuscript edits
I offer comprehensive developmental edits for completed manuscripts.
In-progress manuscripts
Many writers prefer to receive feedback as they write. I offer hourly editing, coaching, manuscript consultations, and chapter-by-chapter support for authors who would like ongoing guidance throughout the writing process.
What clients say
Glenn Kleier, Worldwide Bestselling Author
Prophet of Queens (Thriller)
"Over the years I've had the privilege and pleasure of working with some outstanding editors, and I must say, Bella's eyes are among the best. The whole point of editing is to make clear to the writer issues she/he is simply too myopic to spot. I found myself nodding in agreement with regularity. Always her suggestions were food for thought and stimulated much reflection."
Vanessa Carnavale
The Memories That Make Us (Women's Fiction)
"I know I can rely on Bella not only for honest and useful feedback, but great brainstorming. She helps me draw out the essence of my stories, my character's motivations, and what will make for an even stronger plot. She understands the elements of good fiction and I'm sure her clients will love working with her."
Sarah Hawthorn
The Dilemma (Historical Fiction)
"Bella's structural and copy edits are spot on and have been invaluable in helping to shape my historical narratives. She has a knack for seeing how to strengthen a story and develop deeper reader engagement."
Ann Warner
The Babbling Brook Naked Poker Club Series (Cozy Mystery)
"Being able to critique a novel in a way that the author will find both constructive and inspiring is a gift. And Bella has it."
E.J. Mara
Basic and Almost Friends: The South Louisiana High Series (Young Adult)
"Bella is amazing to work with. Direct yet encouraging, she inspires writers to produce their very best work."
Fees
Every manuscript is unique.
Developmental editing is quoted based on manuscript length, complexity, and turnaround time. Full manuscript edits are typically priced per word or per project, while coaching and partial manuscript reviews may be charged hourly.
Please get in touch for a tailored quote.
Ready to strengthen your manuscript?
Whether you're preparing a manuscript for submission, publication, or self-publishing, I’d love to help.
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Questions?
Editing tip: 1 plot thread at at time